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Samus - Tg Caption by tg4fans Samus - Tg Caption by tg4fans
My first cap. More will come...eventually.

Please, please, PLEASE if there are any spelling mistakes/grammar problems/pet peeves in this post a comment saying what I should to to correct it. I'm trying to improve here ;p


Samus aran (c) Nintendo
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sallyane Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2015
love this story well done
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rockario Featured By Owner May 12, 2011  Hobbyist
In the first paragraph you didn't need to say "he had..." everytime, once would do.
And in the sixth paragraph: the sentence "Slowly his skin started to tighten and slimed his long, legs and arms." Slimmed is spelled wrong and the comma seems out of place. This might've been better split into two thoughts, like "His skin started to tighten, and his legs and arms slimmed."
Also, I don't if you noticed, the text is slightly cut off on the right side.

Sorry if this seems to have an overly critical tone, I'm just kinda tired right now and Calculus is no fun. It was alright, not much for story but the trigger was neat and the tf decent. You seem to have covered everything, including a nice picture.
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tg4fans Featured By Owner May 13, 2011
Actually, your criticism was what I was looking for ;p I hate it when people just say "its good lol xD keep up the gewd werk!! :D:D"

Fixed everything you pointed out, reuploading it in a sec. Just realized my other cap was cut off on the end too, double thanks for that ;)


Also: Calculus sucks. Hated doing that.
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rockario Featured By Owner May 14, 2011  Hobbyist
No problem, I'm glad I could be of some help.
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